Post by himemiya on Jun 17, 2013 4:20:59 GMT -9
Hi, everybody!
May I ask you a favour:
can you please look at the text below and tell me:
what good and bad in description our project?
what is clear and what is not?
I would be grateful for any constructive crytics.
Oentix. The Bottom World.
Crunch of sand on your teeth with a slight scent of blood and insanity. Stupefying heat and muddy crimson skies above.
One thought: to reach the closest Fortress. From there it’s not too far to the Travel Needle.
To all the demons of the Labyrinth with this world gone mad. Just to reach. Just to make this humming in your head go away
Welcome to the Bottom World – the motherworld to all known multiverse. To Oentix.
And welcome to the page dedicated to this strange yet somehow attractive table-top RPG setting,
in which fantasy is blended with bizzare magotech. To the world, once destroyed by gods and restored by humanity.
Rest for now: we can’t afford you much, but every wanderer can get his roof above head and a couple of locals who can tell
you more about this place.
Who knows: maybe soon you’ll head to the Twilight Empire below the Wastelend or to the Lower City… even the Labyrinth
can’t know what awaits you. And for now – just rest. Get used to your new home.
If you like fantasy but tired of cliched-through worlds with their unrealistic confrontation of Good and Evil,
welcome to Oentix – the world that gave birth to all existing.
• The world, where peoples live on artificial frames above the lifeless Wasteland. Where the Sunrise means end to all the living.
• Races which look so familiar from the fist look but turn to be much stranger than expected.
• Magotech – machinery working due to mysterious laws of Phiros currents – the energy that gives life, but can take it away in a whim.
• The choice is yours: you can become an intriguer, concealing his gift for inductory magic for not to be dispatched to Crimson City,
protecting the frames from the sun. You can become a trapper, hunting for rare creatures in the Catacombs.
You can become a pilot of vimana, earning his bread by smuggling and knowing each fold of distorted airspace above the Higher City perfectly.
The choice is yours. This setting has been created for more than five years, constantly changing and growing.
Accumulating new history facts, personalities, sites etc.
But only not so long ago we understood, that it became truly alive.
Now we are describing this world usin Savage Wolds RPG mechanics.
We have plenty of fork to do, but we hope the result’ll be worth it.
May I ask you a favour:
can you please look at the text below and tell me:
what good and bad in description our project?
what is clear and what is not?
I would be grateful for any constructive crytics.
Oentix. The Bottom World.
Crunch of sand on your teeth with a slight scent of blood and insanity. Stupefying heat and muddy crimson skies above.
One thought: to reach the closest Fortress. From there it’s not too far to the Travel Needle.
To all the demons of the Labyrinth with this world gone mad. Just to reach. Just to make this humming in your head go away
Welcome to the Bottom World – the motherworld to all known multiverse. To Oentix.
And welcome to the page dedicated to this strange yet somehow attractive table-top RPG setting,
in which fantasy is blended with bizzare magotech. To the world, once destroyed by gods and restored by humanity.
Rest for now: we can’t afford you much, but every wanderer can get his roof above head and a couple of locals who can tell
you more about this place.
Who knows: maybe soon you’ll head to the Twilight Empire below the Wastelend or to the Lower City… even the Labyrinth
can’t know what awaits you. And for now – just rest. Get used to your new home.
If you like fantasy but tired of cliched-through worlds with their unrealistic confrontation of Good and Evil,
welcome to Oentix – the world that gave birth to all existing.
• The world, where peoples live on artificial frames above the lifeless Wasteland. Where the Sunrise means end to all the living.
• Races which look so familiar from the fist look but turn to be much stranger than expected.
• Magotech – machinery working due to mysterious laws of Phiros currents – the energy that gives life, but can take it away in a whim.
• The choice is yours: you can become an intriguer, concealing his gift for inductory magic for not to be dispatched to Crimson City,
protecting the frames from the sun. You can become a trapper, hunting for rare creatures in the Catacombs.
You can become a pilot of vimana, earning his bread by smuggling and knowing each fold of distorted airspace above the Higher City perfectly.
The choice is yours. This setting has been created for more than five years, constantly changing and growing.
Accumulating new history facts, personalities, sites etc.
But only not so long ago we understood, that it became truly alive.
Now we are describing this world usin Savage Wolds RPG mechanics.
We have plenty of fork to do, but we hope the result’ll be worth it.